More on my Songwriting

So I looked on the Interwebs for help on songwriting. I found on Wikihow that you should make the lyrics first, and it usually helps if you make a poem to adapt into lyrics. So I've started on some Poetry that I'd like some opinions on.

Can you see into my eyes?
Can you see the truth?
Can you see the sorrow and misery,
besides my love for you?

Do you see this heart which beats?
Beating just for you.
If you should just look away,
it will tear in two.

Please give me your honest opinions =]

EDIT: Third stanza (paragraph for those that don't know)

Can you see these legs of mine?
Quiveling in fear.
I confess my heart and soul to you,
so please lend me your ear.

EDIT 2: Fourth stanza (should be the last for today)

I love you,
I truelly do,
what reason have I to lie?
What can I do,
to prove it's true?
Just please don't say goodbye.